How is this story so far?

It's a very good start, but try to remember correct punctuation throughout, and varied lengths in sentences. Also, it's best to not have too many sentences starting with the word 'I'. Slow the story down a bit, take time to describe the surroundings, the emotions, etc. etc., and you'll be good. :) I would say.... 6 or 7 out of 10? Nice job<3